Writing scene 30.

It's not finished. Far from that. I didn't have as much time as I expected this week, but more than that I do have trouble writing that scene. At the moment, the scene is 3800 words long, which is shorter than what I expected but that isn't necessarily a bad thing.

I have trouble finding the right tone. It's a special moment for Eve and Jack and it's not an easy write. Their personalities are slightly shifting as they grow more confident and comfortable with each other, but I don't want to stray too far away from their original self. There is a fragile line and yet a vast difference between evolving a character and writing him completely wrong. For example, Jack is supposed to grow some confidence, and I'm struggling to show that without having him express himself like a total douchebag. Which is wrong. The same goes for Eve.

At the moment, I have about 80 % of the scene, but as I'm reading it, I feel like most of my dialogues are off. The action and the descriptions are good and feel just right, but the dialogues are not. So I will have to rewrite it. I think I can rewrite the dialogue without touching anything else.

Maybe there's also a problem with the rhythm of the scene. My original plan was a three-part one, with a conversation at the start, some action, and then some more talking. That feels a bit sluggish. I will probably lighten the first discussion, add it to the third part, or get rid of it entirely and focus more on the action.

I wrote and rewrote the scene a couple of times already, I will rework it once more next week. I've been planning that scene for so long, I thought it would be an easy write. I should have known better. Nothing good is easy.

The quick sum up :

• Day 6 Part 6 will contain 3 new scenes: scenes 30, 31, and 32.
• Day 6 Part 5 will contain 1 reworked scene: Day 2, scene 3.
• 3816 words of new content so far.
• I'm currently writing scene 30.

You can follow my progress on this Trello board.

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The Naughty Captain